When space is silence…

Words, sounds, and space…

Nefelibata

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What does time mean
                        between   a night   and   a cloud?

Where does space go in the middle of a kiss?
Where is absence when passion ends?

I walk in foggy autumn                   
         cannot                     remember the place
                            I can’t                
                           Though, there’s that perfume
                          scented by golden leaves about to 
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           like bright yellow rain-sparkles in the dark

I walk on scented fog through autumn and absence 

a golden kiss and a cloud 
                                                               Where?

_____Adriana Citlali
XII-XI-MMXX

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Author: Adriana Citlali Ramírez

A citizen of the world, born in Mexico city... A physicist (working as a geophysicist) and a part-time artist (creative writing, oil/acrylic painting, photography)… All posts, visual art, and poems ©Adriana Citlali Ramírez. All rights reserved.

20 thoughts on “Nefelibata

  1. WOW. Quite a beautiful piece and I love the way you arranged the lines. Makes it seem magical and it draws attention to the words. Great writing. 🙂

  2. i love the questioning here, Adriana

  3. Interesting formatting which elevates the energy of the piece.

  4. A great poem… love the questions… Where does space go in the middle of a kiss?

  5. I love the use of space and layout in your poem, Adriana, which give the questions room to breathe and leave the reader time to ponder them, allow tentative answers to form. And then you saturate the reader’s senses with fog, perfume and colour. I love the simile ‘like bright yellow rain-sparkles in the dark’ and that your poem ends on a minor note with absence, a golden kiss and a cloud, which tie the poem up beautifully.

  6. I love poems of questions. And a walk is just the right setting for them. (K)

  7. I love these questions, and the ending is superb!

  8. Beautifully composed and laid out on the page …..

  9. I like this too.
    Anna :o]

  10. Woww!! This is incredibly deep and passionate 😀

  11. This is really intriguing. I can almost smell it! Love that fog, reminds me of the mystery and magic of life

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